Reviews for Stumble
Guest chapter 1 . 5/6/2016
Are you going to publish 'Stumble' this September?
Guest chapter 31 . 7/26/2014
I love your story, dont get me wrong, but I guess you are a fan of James Bond, too. Your line makes me remember a line James Bond said: I have no armor left, youve stripped it from me. Whatever is left of me, Im yours.
Guest chapter 25 . 7/25/2014
Wait that bathroom scene sounds just like James Bond comforting Vesper Lynn after they kill a man?
Guest chapter 4 . 7/25/2014
Pregnant haha, is that a hint?
Guest chapter 3 . 7/25/2014
Oh Daniel's ideal proposal is romantoc. An English man indeed.
Guest chapter 2 . 7/25/2014
Interesting, I cant wait to continue.
Kris ann chapter 1 . 7/22/2014
I jst read stumble and stop the world,i must say ur stories ar kul,smtyms i dnt feel the emotional attachment u try 2 portray but i no its there,and if i may ask,u dont seem 2 b an avid member of the christain faith,or are you jst being imaginative while talking about it,apart from the fact that i dnt lyk hw u describe my religion,am not offended if you are being imaginative and you dont mean it doh,i thnk u're pretty kul,especially wt ur a/n,you greet ur reviewers and share ur opinion on things generally..an u hav loyal readers lyk,i murder on impulse,e.t.c..nd so far not up to 7 spelling errors,way 2 go buddy
Percabethgirl2645 chapter 29 . 7/3/2014
EXCUSE ME, WHAT, WHO DIED, OH GOD, I'M FREAKING OUT
Percabethgirl2645 chapter 12 . 7/3/2014
Awwww, the last line :)
Percabethgirl2645 chapter 11 . 7/3/2014
They are adorable together :). And also, HIS LAST NAME IS BOND?! So cool.
TaraElizabeth28 chapter 27 . 5/5/2014
I really do enjoy this story but i think your getting some of the details mixed up. You've stated she was a junior but then in previous you've also said she was a sophomore. You also said that Daniel has two younger sisters in beginning chapters not an older one.
Kat chapter 6 . 1/3/2014
Loving the story so far but one tiny thing...Transylvania is a region not a city.
Mitch chapter 24 . 12/14/2013
I wasn't going to review until the end but I had to. This story has such a good plot line and could be completely amazing. Don't get me wrong, it's certainly good as is, I'd like to see the characters fleshed out a bit more though and perhaps more description in the actual scenes to lengthen them. The POV randomly shifts between Gemma and Dan too, which could be worked on. You might need to edit a bit more, I'm sure Daniel said he had two younger sisters in a previous chapter but now he only has one older sister. Previously Gemma said she could give up pizza and later stated she never eats pizza. Daniel said he was going to propose to Eva at one point and then later says he has never even thought about the prospect of marrying someone (which is a given that you have if you were going to propose). You also sometimes repeat things from previous chapters in future chapters. So only small issues like that which perhaps are caused by fictionpress authors such as yourself concentrating on more than one story at a time.

Anyway, I really do love the story and I think you've got some great work here. So with that said, I'm off to continue the rest of the story!
ally chapter 12 . 12/5/2013
hmm I'm guessing it's Harvey... hmm.. we shall see!
Juliet Scar chapter 9 . 11/28/2013
LUCKY REVIEW NUMBER 1001! I kept my promise :)
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