sorry for the late review, im so glad there's an epilogue for Stumble. Gemma & Daniel (Y)

continue writing more of these stories, dont stop!

Very good story so far although I've noticed a couple things that amused me quite a lot:

1. It seems you got Daniel Bond's name by combining that of James Bond and the actor who plays him, Daniel Craig.

2. That scene with the shower was very similar to the one in Casino Royale

Far from accusing you of plagiarism however, I actually find the combined name idea pretty good. I've read another one of your stories already (Stop the World) and I have to say that I'm pleasantly surprised - there are good authors on this site but it is rare that I find one who doesn't have plot holes or excessive grammar mistakes. In short, great job.

Cheers,

Elissya

Loved it! Good job with this story.

I have read your story and really enjoyed it.

I am probably a lot older than most of your readers and not particularly witty.

If you wouldn't mind, I would like to correct a few grammatical errors you have made, normally these would have been corrected by an editor.

I think it is a great feel good story and definitely lifts one's spirits. I am of course now reading the story after the entire story has been completed which I gather from the site is not the norm.

I think the story unfolded beautifully and had a few interesting twists. I especially like the way they don't just suddenly fall into each other's arms after he saves her and live happily ever after. I think there being an elapse of time before he comes back makes it more believable and real.

Anyway, my offer stands, if you would like me to correct the few grammatical errors, let me know.

Best regards,

Tania

aw aw aw

the only words I could

think of that would describe

that chapter, it was so cute

ahh

aw aw aw!

i don't know how you do it but your characters seem so *real*

i think my heart broke a bit with Gemma's in the last chapter

very very excellent

ever thought about actually getting published? like in book form?

that bastard

nice twist

i'm so glad this is complete!

so what exactly did happen to make her father go this crazy?

either i missed it or you haven't said yet...

Bond

Daniel Bond

sorry that made me laugh

i love the nickname "Code Blue"!

it's so perfect!

nice story, you have a couple of continuity errors; Daniel planned on proposing to Eva in one chapter then he never thought about marriage. And Gemma explained her love of sunflowers twice.

Earlier you had said that Daniel was going to propose to Eva when they broke up and now you are saying that he never thought of it. I really like your story so far but I think you need to edit it and get someone else to read it for mistakes like that.

I imagined the ending a little more detailed but I loved it anyways. Your story was really unique and interesting. It was also really easy-to-read and basically just all-around awesome :) You did an amazing job on it. I fell in love with Gemma and Daniel :D

LOL this was a great first chapter! I loved the last sentence too xD The way you write is really easy to read and interesting. I'm excited to continue your story! :D

I got up to chapter 26 of this, before I finally decided to quit. It's well written - it really is - but I found that Daniel lost his cool, passive personality that first attracted me to the story. After the scene in chapter 25 of the shower - which took me a while to realise was from Casino Royale, and then the whole 'Daniel Bond' and blue eyes things hit me - I found myself disinterested. This started out pretty good, but in all honesty, I feel like I've just wasted three complete hours of my day. Maybe this is different with your other stories, it's just in this one they seem to lose character too quickly and everything seems like one, big fangirlish Daniel Craig thing.

Sorry if I offended you in any way, but I thought you'd prefer the truth about my opinion. Really, some bits made me smile and laugh, but the whole thing seems sort of... off.

Loved the bit involving the cake fight, though. Made me grin like an idiot.

- Bex