I noticed some spelling mistakes and I wished that there were more details to the story, but so far it's a very good plot and I hope you continue it. I do wonder what is going to happen to Emma. Good luck with the story and other future ones you may write!

I like your smooth,natural writing style. It adds well to the pace of the story and avoids bogging down the reader.

You described the first part exceptionally well I thought. I could see the scene vividly like a film so well done.

I don't know why but it reminds me of 'The Lovely Bones' which is a good thing.

Nice work

i don't feel like logging in but i am a member lol

i love it you have a great style and a talent for intensity/suspense :)

keep writing 4evr