What the fudge. Haha. Ryan finally meets the one for him. *sigh* But I still want him to sort of pursue Madison.

A jealous Caine is adorable.

This is cute. Haha!

I'm really enjoying every chapter of the story.

I'm liking the Nate-Chelsea pair. :)

Yes, she has definitely ruined him! So, I'm hoping Madison wouldn't be giving in to her hormones.. yet.

Damn, they kissed! :D

If this story was on facebook i'd like it lol

I just absolutely LOVE the characters, their chemistry, and the stroyline (as cliched as it is)

honestly you've taken 2 or 3 cliche plots, combined them, and made a fabulous story out of it

most of all though its ur writing style that really gets u reading.. honestly ive read SO many stories on here n its so damn rare these days to find something as good as this

so thank you for sharing. as long as you keep writing, I shall keep reading :)

sarah

I swear I am in love with your story. I love the humor, the tone, everything. I never thought Ryan would harbor feelings for Madison. Oh, God. As much as I love Caine, I also don't want to see Ryan brokenhearted or something. Anyways, it would be great if Caine will fall for Madison first before he even gets to bed her.

Oh, I love Madison. Haha! It's funny the way she sees things, like sleeping with Nathan is like sleeping with the whole school (except her, of course.) :D

Oh gosh, this seems interesting.

I love this story! :) I absolutely adore Madison's blunt-ness, if that's a word, and her comments. And I'm glad they're abstaining, because it's dragging the story along quite nicely. If they already had sex, all that sexual tension would evaporate (maybe, unless you write really well).

I'm surprised you managed to write so much but still keep me on my toes. I stayed up late last night trying to finish reading it but I couldn't so I had to wait until I came home from school. It's just that addicting!

Anyways, I love love this story and I can't wait to read your next update, which is hopefully soon (wink wink, nudge nudge, hint hint) :)

Thanks for writing!

hey so I just read the whole story and I'm going to give my own "pros and cons" and since I like to deliver bad news first I'll start out with the cons.

Cons:

1) Your story is, unfortunately, very sexist which is extremely frustrating. Every time there is a "negative" personality trait (e.g. being too caring, holding back from sex, etc.) that is portrayed as "girl-y". In fact, Madison constantly calls Caine a girl when he is doing something she doesn't like. Girls really aren't that bad, we're actually pretty amazing (so are guys) so you might want to lay off the blatant genderization.

2) Guys just don't act the way you're writing them. They don't "punch each other in the arms" as a way of brotherly love, nor do they do some "cool hand shake". Guys are guys, they're just like girls and communicate with each other in a similar fashion.

3) Sex. Sex. Sex. Sex. Sex. Chill out with the sex. I understand that people like having it, it's a fun thing to do. But we aren't rabbits and nor do we "fuck" like them. We're human beings, we think and we can control ourselves. The fact that Nate is giving Caine hell for controlling himself for 2 weeks is pitiful.

3)Caine is willing to "reap the benefits" of the relationship by having sex with Madison? Yet he tries to convince everyone he loves her. He knows he's going to hurt her, he knows that having sex with her will hurt her even more, but he should do it...why again? It's a little contradictory and makes Caine look shallow.

4)The way Madison eats, gets angry, does sports, etc. makes her look men go crazy because she looks like she's in a porno. That's just strange and awkward. Also it's slightly frustrating that Madison considers herself very smart but she insults anything that isn't science? That's a little "counter intelligent" and like that flamer said, it makes her look really shallow.

5) Watch out for grammar/spelling issues. Throughout the story you use the wrong tense. For example you'll say "She was use to being the hated girl" when it should be "She was used to being the hated girl". Just stuff like that keep appearing, constantly.

6) I understand that this is a story and it's meant to be a little unbelievable but it would be nice if some of it were based in reality.

Pros

1) You have a writing style that's captivates people. If it were any other writer and I had read the first chapter of this story I would have closed it without even thinking to review. But your writing style is captivating.

2)Although it's a cliche plot, you've made an interesting cliche plot.

You've got a bunch of work to do but that doesn't mean you don't have skill! there's definitely skill there, just keep working on developing your stories.

Oh no. Love triangle. But Ryan's so sweet! No!

This sounds really good so far. I like how every person isn't perfect.