So, I like the story so far. I am not a fan of fictionpress vampire stories, but your work is pretty original. I like the character development so far as well. Tsubomi and Copernicus both jump out as really well developed and interesting characters.

My only critique so far is mechanical. I originally presumed the story was 3rd person limited from Tsubomi's POV, but it seems more like 3rd person omniscient and you haphazardly head-jump back and forth between Tsubomi and Copernicus. The POV is a bit disorienting and hard to follow. The dialogue in the story can be hard to follow sometimes too. There is a lot of short rapid dialogue back and forth between Tsubomi and Copernicus and it is hard to keep track of who is speaking.

Anyway, I hope that helps with editing. I plan to keep reading because I am enjoying it.

I hope that Tsubomi can get out and not get caught again. I don't want Hizaki to win again. :C

I love the MillieXYale relationship even more now!

This was a great chapter! I really loved it!

Aww! I squeed when I read this! Tsubomi and Copernicus are so cute together!

Aw, poor Millie. I feel sorry for her and wow, Hide is plotting to kill his own men...Then again Estella did betray him by trying to keep Yale to himself. I wonder what will happen to her. Will she die by Copernicus' hand or Hide's?

This was a wonderful chapter. I liked your imagery and the bond between Millie and Yale. I hope that she gets to see him again.

Things are getting heated up with the action! I love your fight scenes so much and you make all of them so different! Much kudos to yuou for that.

Omg, I love YaleMillie as a couple! They are adorable together! -ships them- I can't wait for your next chapter!

I have to know what happens next! Please don't let Millie die! I like her and her yaoi fantasies between Copernicus and Tsubomi! I wonder what Copernicus got for her as a present too. I think it's funny that Tsubomi cringes at it.

Very cute, and Millie always makes me laugh. Good job on this chapter! I love it.

This story was amazing and I'd definitely recommend anyone who had a notion to read it. Just awesome characters, superb action and it was fun to read. See you around and thanks for letting me read such a great story!

This is just a bunch of closing, and I had a feeling it would be. All in all it was enjoyable and it answered questions that I had a little earlier. Your story was amazing and your characters are fantastic. I'm glad I could help give you some great reviews. Your story definitely deserves the recognition. I consider it a classic. Now, onto the epilogue.

Oh man, this fight was just epic, and it looks like everything came out for our heroes. It's hard to know that there is another chapter after this, since everything died down. I wonder what else is left for me to learn about the characters and their struggles.

Yale is back, and man this is getting so gripping. I can't take my eyes away from reading the words. Sorry if these reviews are short. It's just that I want to hurry up and read the next chapter. I'm ready to see what happens in the end.