Reviews for the great vendetta
thewhimsicalbard chapter 2 . 1/6/2010
Hmm... Interesting contrast, for sure. Road kill, rain, and flower petals. I thought your parallel structure was laudable. There aren't really too many layers of meaning in here, but it is still a good message. I honestly think you could have communicated this better as a poem, perhaps, but otherwise it's a fairly decent piece.

If you have another piece (preferably poetry - I'm better at that) you want me to take a look at, I'd be happy to do another little review exchange!

thewhimsicalbard
thewhimsicalbard chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
Aww... This poor thing only had one review! Let me see if I can brighten it up some?

This first chapter is... quite strange. Incomplete. Perhaps the next section will reveal more?
nevermore199 chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
It's short, but it seems to speak at something larger. I like it. :)