aha! not as much of a rogue as he is just tired of being eyecandy.

i love their awkwardness - both on the defensive yet trying to be pleasant - and it's all failing so miserably. i've cringed every time Sera put her foot in her mouth - and lol'd when you wrote she learned to speak around it.

i always thought it would be interesting to work in a funeral home - death is part of life, after all. i wonder if Griffin's views of life and death will come into view. i'm curious as to how much of his life has been influenced by his Native American culture - if at all.

Sera sounds lovely - somewhat Christina Hendricks-ish. :D

once again i'm late to the party, but i'm sticking around to the end and then we're going to talk about about everyone...let's start now with Sera.

once again you've created a mature character (thank you thank you thank you!) who doesn't give up all of her secrets all at once, and who isn't too "thinky" - she *does* what she wants, consequences be damned. you give us glimpses of who Sera is, but we won't have her full story until the end, will we?

i love the atmosphere you create - i could see the champagne sparkling, hearing the rustle of tulle, and i pictured her thinking about getting on her hands and knees and looking for her panties. (are you going to draw a picture of the dress?)

and of course i cannot wait to meet the new rogue...on to the next chapter. (btw, you may want to put a note up on aff informing your readers that you're publishing your work on this site - you deserve many many many more reviews.)

love it! but do i smell a love triangle going on...brice-sera-griffin? hmm hmm hmm?

I absolutely adore this story already!

hope you update really soon :)

I love it! But, that's a given I love all your stories.

i love this story as well! the characters are vibrant and have a life of their own... i agree, this chapter is a little choppy, but perhaps it fits into the sera's haphazard life? just a thought.

aw... im sad now.

I don't think the chapter is that much all over the place, everything is kind of seamlessly connected after all. Beginnings are sometimes a real pain to write when trying to introduce many things, it's hard to get that flow instead a sort of stickiness and randomness... I think that shows a little, for instance his choice of clothing is described rather keenly, though only in passing, and if the Seventh Floor Girl doesn't play a bigger part then she seems like a bit random way of telling more about his character or something.

It's not easy to get two characters just randomly bump into each other every so often without it seeming forced, but I think their encounters have been plausible that way. And both characters seem very interesting so I hope to read more about them soon. :-)

love it! love it! love it! been waiting for something new from you ;) love your writing. keep it up and update soon :P

Camii

I really like this chapter and I hope that you continue with the story.

i like eet! D

Interesting as usual, the mythology tidbits as well. :-D You've really done a lot of planning and research for this, exciting when more and more things are unravelled (like in this chapter neatly amongst their dialog as opposed to there suddenly being some "forced" information overload, heh)...