|Reviews for demise|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/1/2009
Thanks for participating in the Review Marathon!
I like the idea here. I think you described a really interesting picture. I like the personification. It's really well done. However, the phrasing just seems odd. "blinking in turns" "wish upon their plummet" and other parts sounded kinda awkward...
Still, nicely done.
| Mirabella chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
Beautiful, and sad too. :) Poor little stars. But you have a most elegant way of telling their death. :) Bravo.
| tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 9/25/2009
I really like this. It's simple yet beautifully written.
I loved the first two lines and "celestial deaths" and the use of "plummet" and "hard earth." Last stanza is just stunning!
| VELVETxKISSES chapter 1 . 9/25/2009
Haha, I don't fully understand this, but I like it. I like it a lot. Good work. Sorry I don't have constructive critiques for you but, to me, you don't need 'em.
| Wynter WolfSong chapter 1 . 9/25/2009
Very nice. Reminds me of how I usually end my night.
| Isca chapter 1 . 9/25/2009
"Winking out of existence." Well hmm. This line is very unique and interesting. The word 'winking' seems rather flirtatious to me, so it's really rather fascinating to think that the stars 'love' themselves to death.
"The celestial deaths." Brilliant.
"I bid the stars goodnight." Hah. What a line. It's downright masterful. I love it. :D