Reviews for Car Ride
Stormy Daye chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
I really like the ending "With our technicolour lives/Receding from a happy ending/Just never meant to be, anyway"

I also like the image of "You and I in sepia"

The second line "To heavy just to breathe" it should be 'too heavy..' instead.

I like the visuals the language creates, good job!
RuhFuh chapter 1 . 1/7/2010
"I play your serenade

On ivory keys"

"You and I in sepia

Start to fray on the edges"


Try and fix the ending, though.