|Reviews for Car Ride|
| Stormy Daye chapter 1 . 3/8/2010
I really like the ending "With our technicolour lives/Receding from a happy ending/Just never meant to be, anyway"
I also like the image of "You and I in sepia"
The second line "To heavy just to breathe" it should be 'too heavy..' instead.
I like the visuals the language creates, good job!
| RuhFuh chapter 1 . 1/7/2010
"I play your serenade
On ivory keys"
"You and I in sepia
Start to fray on the edges"
Try and fix the ending, though.