Reviews for Prophecy of Seven |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This is ver good. I really liked this, I'd love to read more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You have done well with this story! 13 reviews! I can say that it is deserving of it. You have worked in several of the things of the story that are well known, the dwarves, the killing of the boar, and the glass coffin. I like the twist on this. I can see where the queen is creating an enemy in her daughter by doing this. So, this can lead to the conflict. I like the reference to the blood of the boar on Snow's hands. That was a different kind of image indeed. You did well with the description of the hunt. It really put the reader into the action of the story. I have no complaints so far. Thanks for reading one of my stories. The Fintail story is not an original piece. It was meant as fanfiction, which I can actually write short stories for. My own stuff gets complicated. But, I figure that it would do better on this site, because I am much more active here. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wowza. I kind of respected Malice at first because she refused to kill SNow in the beginning...but now I think that SOB deserves to die. I mean, we never actually "met" Rothgor, but I just give my sympathy to Snow and best of luck on kicking the sh*t out of her mother. DROP KICK HER! Haha this reminds me of the song, Brick By Boring Brick by Paramore. It's like one of my favorite songs...you should give it a listen, it's absolutely amazing. And it's new..from their album "Brand New Eyes" that just came out Tuesday. But yeah I loveed this...nothing grmmatically wrong. Maybe a tad bit more description would suffice. I didn't really catch what Nicolas or Malice looked like...but maybe I just skipped over it or am insane and like to make things up? Haha no clue. But great chapter. ~Drac |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, SW gonna kick Malice's butt. Not to mention her brother's. More! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, finally you've updated. :) Anyway, I guess this was the chapter that will pave the way for the plot. Snow White doesn't seemed as inhuman as I would think otherwise though. I think this is something you might want to take a look at. Obviously Malice planned to make her children like her. Nicolas is a success, so I will want to know the reason why Snow White was considered a failure by me in this aspect. As for Malice's act here, it's going along fine with her character. But I'm not too sure about her apparent humane nature in the prologue though from what she has said to Snow White. It really seems that she doesn't care for her daughter. Or if I were to look at this in another view, I guess this can be termed as Malice's attempt to make her daughter like her. Anyway, it seems that the dwarves are going to be a bit part role in this story, albeit this is just only my own guess. P.S: Thanks very much for your review on The Eternal Grail. Pay back via the next chapter. :) Add P.S: Skip the Omake chapter if you're not one for random crude humour. That one doesn't serve any purpose anyway apart from the Magus explanation. :S -From The Roadhouse. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Malice! What a pain she is! Excellent chapter. I love how you've started this story by flipping fairy tales on their head. Excellent choice, having Snow's Prince displayed in the glass coffin. This is extremely engaging. Oh, and good job of creating a great introductory visual in the first scene. Nicely done :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wellthis was intresting, nice twist on the seven dwarves:P Malice is a b*. Hah the prince in the glass coffin, im alwas sick of the dashing prince rushing in to save the queen:P Dont bother returning this review, reading for fun. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I absolutely loved the prologue it left me so interested and excited! The way you twisted the story and changed the plot line of the original stories was great. I also loved that I found no spelling errors and I didn’t stumble over any of the words. I hope you update soon because I really want to know what happens next! Sending smileys your way! :) :) :) :) :) :) Mystic |
![]() ![]() ![]() Lol Great prologue! I think you set the fairy-taleish tone very well. Hehe And I love the name Malice. Can't wait for the next chapter! yay! You're back to original fiction! |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG wow I love this first chapter, its kind of like a remake of snow white a little bit. I love the mirrors lines in it too. And since I'm a big fan of fairytales and such it just makes it even more perfect then it already is. Its going on my favoruite :) x |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow I absolutely LOVED this! Haha that was weird, but I love spins off of earlier stories when the writer puts their own creative twist on it. It was amazing. Please please please stay with this. I'll be heartbroken if anything happened. It was great. ~8days, though some at The Roadhouse insist on calling me Drac :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Herro from The Roadhouse. :) Well, it seems that you're actually doing a certain parody of fairy tales for this story. Rather interesting to me albeit I've seen too much dominant female presence in the stories I've read in this site. Anyway, I can see an interesting start to this story not to mention you can actually input a certain humane nature in Malice. I believe that this will have a profound effect on the story for sure. My only advice here is that it's best in the interest of this story for this humane factor not to be just a one shot impact to Malice's character. Try to use this factor to your advantage in the sense that Malice's impact on the story will be so much more than just the standard villain. And after seeing the part on the Prophet, I believe you can actually input a certain factor of humour here from what I've seen in the brief mention of the song. Apart from that, nothing much to say. P.S: Pay back via The Eternal Grail. :) -From The Roadhouse. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a good beginning for this story. You can't but help like the mirror/prophet. Actually, I kind of like the evil queen. But, I am a dark type person anyway. It will be interesting to see an evil Snow White. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice idea, i like the talk with the mirror. Ugth being forced to ryhme for the rest of youre life. Id go insane. I also like youre description of queen malice(wat else did the parents expect when they named her:P) Cant wait to see wat happens:D Thank god she didnt kill the toddlers, i dunno why just didnt want her too. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, I loved the conversation with the mirror. The rhymes were fun, as well as the Queen's personality... Fun to read, not fun for anyone feeling her wrath, of course. The mirror and evil queen a very classic fairytale image, and I think you handled it well. And I like how you begin to twist the tales even in the prologue, with the 'different upbringing' for Snow. Nice way of tying in your overall plot in that last line as well. I can't wait for more! |