|Reviews for Lose Control|
| Imperially Slim chapter 1 . 11/23/2009
Honestly? You're a far better writer than most of the teen romancers on this site. Your descriptions captivate the reader; your stories are short enough that people with ADD can read them, but not so short that you blink and it's gone. It's like apple juice. Great while it's still there, and leaves a yummy taste in your mouth.
I don't know. That's just my odd little analogy.
Con-crit: Verb tenses. You're teetering between past and present. Pick one (you're mostly in present, and that's what really grabbed me at the start) and you'll be good.
PS: check out Maddening, my novel-in-progress. Shameless advertising, I know, but hey...
| Belle Femme chapter 1 . 10/14/2009
you should have made this rated M and went all out with it or wrote more.