Reviews for Entangled |
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![]() ![]() ![]() does this mean you're officially back and will be updating more regularly? :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG! I love it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG so sad :,( she should atleast listen to him :/ update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() My god, this was so beautifully written :O Man, I wish I'm as good xD But still...it's GOOD! It's...it's...I'm lost for words...D: Eh...If I have to compare mine with yours, mine is...mine needs work. So in other words, this is VERY VERY GOOD. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Kellsey is an interesting character. Again I point out that you have to be careful with the mistakes you make. Although youre improving, I still come across them from time to time. Also the part where Sab goes to sleep and the story skips to the next morning, I think you can place a division there. Story is still good, so keep up the job! PB |
![]() ![]() ![]() Is she gonna get back with Jasper? Anyways, this story is great, I liked the summary and when I read the first chapter it drew me in. I like all the characters, wel written. Interesting story, please write more, UPDATE SOON! GRF |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow i love this story! xD i wonder what will happen. i think shes going to go back to jasper |
![]() ![]() ![]() lol he was jealous! haha thats so cute! this chapter made my day :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Haha' I love the idea of this its great. The summary already drew me in. And I love Jeremy already. Good Job! -K. (GRF) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hahahah great job with the story. Really interested in what happens next! |
![]() ![]() ![]() The only thing I have to say about the story that bothers me is the errors. But even though it has so many errors its easy to read through and I cant stop1 PB |
![]() ![]() ![]() There are many errors in the story, maybe you should proof read it and correct it, or get at spelling/ grammar beta to do it for you! But still a very good story. I did notice that Sabrina likes to repeat herself, because she says some things twice (like: same old jerk). But still very interesting PB |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really liked the beginning. It went a bit fast, but I guess that is okay. I did notice a few errors though, like f.e "She was in a room with this person and worst!", you mean worse. But all in all, very interesting story. PB |
![]() ![]() ![]() As a general rule, you should always proofread what you put up here at least once. I really love the song lyrics that you put up at the beginning of the chapter! Oh, and just so you know, when you copy and paste things from Word, it adds the HTML on it. I didn't know if you noticed it was on there, but it may help to add. I really like Becca and Jeremy is shaking up to be a right jerk! I hate jerky guys in real life, but there's something endearing about them in stories! _ Cassandra |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love forced marriages! This was a bit heavy on the dialogue, but it's still a wonderful idea. I'm curious to know how they ended up in the same bed together. I have a feeling it was more than just the cliche get drunk and end up in bed together! Thanks for sharing. Cassandra |