Reviews for Inherited Responsibilities
DormDad chapter 7 . 12/22/2012
The flying sarcasm is thick in this one. I was highly surprised at where it ended. I never really got into this story though the way I have with your others. Not to say that this one is bad, but it says, "I am unfinished". This seems to be a really good starter, hopefully you will come back to this and finish or give us more.
Raha chapter 7 . 11/13/2011
This story rocks. I love the whole concept, and it's a fast read cause the chapters are so short. Are you going to continue writing on this? I like how you've kind of personified the magic and various objects in the house, too.
Rhie chapter 7 . 1/23/2010
Cute story...
Aztira chapter 7 . 10/8/2009
This story just keeps getting better and better :)

Update soon Please
Lady Loor chapter 5 . 10/6/2009
Her aunt sounds very eccentric...

Oh, and something must be wrong with the review system because I definitely typed "one thousand" not "ten" in my previous reviews...
Lady Loor chapter 4 . 10/5/2009
In my review for ch.6, I meant 10 words, not 10...

Anyway, keep writing!
Lady Loor chapter 7 . 10/4/2009
I think I like this chapter the best. It's so perfectly random. :D

Just a suggestion: start developing the plot before you sit down and write the next chapters (unless you've already done that). I mean, spontanteous is great but sometimes you end up going nowhere at all. Happens to me all the time *sigh* so I've learned to sit down and plan out the plot. Also, maybe make the next chapter a bit longer?
Lady Loor chapter 6 . 10/4/2009
I'm hoping for a bit of plot development some time soon. Short chapters are nice, when they have at least 10 words.

I wonder who the frog is...
Anti-Christ's Angel chapter 2 . 10/1/2009
I like your premise and I acutally prefer short chapters. I like to read things in small bytes, but of course that's just me.

I must warn you against the name Raven. It's seen as a typical Mary Sue name. In fact this Mary Sue litmus test specifically asks if your character's name is Raven.



Saying 'yes' scores you 3 points. I guess its just too popular a name in fiction these days.
Aztira chapter 2 . 9/28/2009
This is really good so far.

I'm very impressed considering you're only about a thousand words in and I'm already irritated there isn't more.

Besides, I've always preferred stories where the hero is a woman.

I think your story shows promise. However, I also believe that your chapters should be a little bit longer.

Anyway, keep up the great work and please update soon!
Lady Loor chapter 2 . 9/28/2009
This isn't a bad beginning, but your chapters could definitely be longer. In fact, this could be part of Chapter 1, which I would label as a prologue. Try adding more description and action in your later chapters.

Your writing has a light and humorous feel to it. I like that in a fantasy. Just work on making those chapters longer :)