|Reviews for Jack in a Box|
| Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 10/25/2009
I really like this.
Very unique and interesting :)
The rhyme scheme in the first stanza didn't quite go along with the rest of the stanzas, maybe rearrange the lines to have it fit, just a suggestion.
Other than that I liked the rhyme and the rhythm of the piece.
Nicely done :)
| Teufel66 chapter 1 . 10/8/2009
this is actually quite frightening...lol, i see you are a fan of chan wook-park! you must love lady vengeance, no?
| LaFarfalla chapter 1 . 10/6/2009
...As if I needed another reason for being afraid of a Jack in a Box.
Anyways, this really scary. You use imagery very well to create a frightening image of this monster.
"In ophidious eyes" - I looked up ophidious and it didn't even recognize that as a word but it referred me to ophidian which means belonging to an order of snakes. So congrats on using your poetic license and making a new word or at least using a very rarely used word! It sounds cool too.
| TheHeatherPatterson chapter 1 . 9/29/2009
This was scary, good thing I don't own a jack in the box. Those things scared me even before your story lol. I love it!
| xxxDarkTearsxxx chapter 1 . 9/29/2009
nice i like it. please read more