Reviews for Forbidden
DeadlyMidnightshade chapter 7 . 9/21/2014
I died when Trey yelled at his dick XD
Missing My Heart chapter 19 . 12/21/2013
Oh gods, the feels! How could you? I cried, I really did! How could you kill Trey?!
TheGhostChild chapter 1 . 10/3/2013
I'm seeing awesome similarities here to a certain Tv series. Almost expected the car to be an Impala.
But regardless of similarities or not, great writing! I'm excited to see what happens. First mermaid story I've read.
KissForARose chapter 19 . 12/30/2012
Why the hell did u kill him off?! like WTF! Thats a shit ending, though i loved the story.
DNight chapter 19 . 10/21/2012
noooooooooooooooooooo you did not ill trey *crys* wtf
Fumiki chapter 19 . 9/26/2011
I was planning a murder for you... HOW COULD YOU KILL HIM? Then I noticed you made a sequel. So I'm off. See you there!
xoxlizzie chapter 4 . 7/20/2011
I loved the dream that Trey had :) This story gets better and better with every chapter!
xoxlizzie chapter 3 . 7/20/2011
This chapter was so dramatic! It is so much fun to read about Trey fighting vampires!
xoxlizzie chapter 2 . 7/20/2011
Oh devilsh cliffhanger! I loved the first chapter, it sounds great!
xoxlizzie chapter 1 . 7/20/2011
I'm so excited to see who this mysterious guy with green eyes is! This story seems amazing so far, I'm excited to see how it'll work out!
JudasMonster chapter 19 . 7/9/2011
I thought this story was a bit unrealistic and rushed at around the 1/4 mark.

Wasn't Trey reluctant to even like boys at all in the first place? How does he go from that to undying love in just a few chapters?

I thought the characters weren't all that developed. At first wasn't Trey some bad ass hunter? Next thing you know he's Dean's crying, sniveling bitch? Ehh. Weird o_o

I thought it was strange how the parent's just happen to have a weapon that kills anything in their closet, lolz.

Ending was iffy too. I thought Dean might be in more of hysterics. Your "epilogue" was more like the last chapter. The events preceding would be the epilogue. But it seems you have a sequel, so it's all good.

For the most part your spelling was good, but the tense changes were just awkward.

All in all, story was okay. Dialogue seemed forced. Plot was decent. But just too convenient. AKA the sword?

Well, yah. Thanks for sharing :P looking forward to sequel.

Mist of Shadows chapter 19 . 2/25/2011
Ouch. I do love the way the story panned out even with Trey dead. I was not expecting that but it completes the story. A suicidal vampire without who I presume is his mate is not a good thing. If I ask nicely will you tell me if Dean also dies? Do the parents ever find out they were together? Does Dean finally kill his dad?
SerpentMoon chapter 19 . 10/18/2010
aww crappy ending, shoulda Changed trey
tragicheaven chapter 19 . 8/17/2010
Cool story! For me the best part was how it ended. No happy ever after here. :)
xXxStarStrifexXx chapter 19 . 7/12/2010
You made me cry with this so many times you horrible, horrible person! Why did he have to die? You built up all my hopes :'[

It was amazing though :D
42 | Page 1 .. Last Next »