Reviews for Shine!
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 12/18/2009
"fly around my tummy cos of you!"... 'cause

"I hide all the umbrellas cos"...'cause

I thought this one was a little bit ridiculous. It just seemed too much, especially that umbrella part. Also, it seemed odd 'cause it was hard to tell the relationship between the two people. Does he know that you like him?

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ADSpencer chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
This is sweet in a special way. I think it would make an interesting song if it was expanded slightly. Nice poem :)
NocturnalNerd chapter 1 . 10/7/2009
I thought this was really sweet. The swear spoiled it somewhat. It just didn't seem to fit. It had a very sweet and nice ending though. :)
Sheila Ibre chapter 1 . 10/5/2009
Ooh, I can imagine this as a catchy song - the kind of upbeat music that's sort of in-your-face and yet utterly cute. ) Nicely written. Thanks for sharing
Punslinger chapter 1 . 10/5/2009
What a charming love poem! If you wrote it to a real person, I am sure you two must be very happy together. If not, it is still a good poem.
Isca chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
"Push them away." I love this part of the piece-it's so powerful. :)
Qzie chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
Aw, that made me smile a lot. :) It was very sweet and made my heart happy. _ Great job! -Qzie
MoonlightRouge chapter 1 . 10/3/2009
beautiful poetry i like the tittle

very nice, keep it up