|Reviews for These Vampire Hearts|
| He Named It Fluffy chapter 1 . 11/5/2010
I like it :)
| backseat compromises chapter 1 . 9/28/2010
I love the last three lines. Vampire heart - love the concept too.
| Field of Innocence chapter 1 . 9/12/2010
I think this is a really good poem. I like the way you say that 'I miss seeing you', saying 'I miss your moon face through my window.' I just think the phrase moon face is really pretty.
I also like the phrase 'vampire heart.' (When I think of 'vampire', I think of deep blood red, and when I think of 'heart', I think an almost pink, red color. So in my mind, that phrase of clashing reds is really pretty.)
I don't know, I think the lines,
'But if your heart was a vampire heart
like these vampire hearts surrounding
our mortal graves...'
I think they sound almost delicate, but the next line seems to imply that if 'your' heart *was* a vampire heart, the narrator would almost hate 'you'. The next line shows emotion filled actions. (I'm making no sense, am I?)
I liked this poem. good job.
| Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 9/9/2010
Wow, interesting indeed. Don't know what else to say lol. Please post some more poems soon! You haven't posted for months!
| Nite Cat Princess chapter 1 . 8/13/2010
Very interesting I like vampires alot and anime too and music
You rite really good
I bet you have a ton of reviews compared to me only having 3 or 4 now!
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 12/18/2009
"Every night at night I take my curtains away,"... you don't need the at night. With every night, you already established that it;s night
"that is why I fall in love with you,"... fell... it's past tense.
"I would bite you in everywhere and"... bite you everywhere
"As if it was the bittersweetest wine ever." most bittersweet
Gotta be honest, this piece completely confused me. I think you need to describe a bit more the difference between liking blood and having a vampire heart. I like the last line though.
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| XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 1 . 10/16/2009
I really like this. Great job. Love how it flows. Keep up the awsome work. adding 2 favs
| Punslinger chapter 1 . 10/9/2009
A bittersweet mix of love and madness, making us wonder where one ends and the other begins, like two lovers losing themselves in each other. Strangely beautiful and compelling.
| MoonlightRouge chapter 1 . 10/6/2009
interesting, I favor the fourth line most don't know why and great ending,keep it up