I love you my sister. Thank you for sharing this with me.

I've just recently gone over some of your works... It's beautiful, really it is. I'm so glad I've come upon you, this is, say, a diamond in the rough.

Your work seriously needs to be recognised. 145 people is a lot, but... I will be recommending your writing to other people.

Btw, did your novella ever get published in the end? I'd love to buy a copy, one I can hold in my hand would be wonderful.

Regards.

I respect you, Kayla. I respect you so much that my heart hurts. I'm sorry that you had to go through all of this... it feels more like a diary than a book.

I understand abuse.

beautiful.

there's nothing else to say.

omg how did u come up w/ this? Did this like happen to you or something?

haunting as it is beautiful in a heartbreaking way. this bittersweet story will leave you still thinking long after you read it. The poetic rythmic writing quiets the world around you as you lose yourself into the hurt and world of Kayla.

I have to tell you. This whole story is so poetic, so tragic. I can't stop reading. It's beautifully written. The things you've written are terrible, and yet incredible. You've captured something real in this.

And the last section of this one - I can't tell you how amazing it is. "How can someone hate a broken man?"

Beautiful.

The writing technique was awesome! It was hard to get used to. The writing technique made me feel weird inside. It was over all awesome; the story was just to messed up for me. Keep it up!

Your writing style is very different, and I don't know whether or not I like it.

I love the poetic imagery and the language you use, and the philosophy and all that, but at the same time, the disjointedness and the lack of actually time and order is something that's hard to get into.

I understand why you've done it and it makes it that much more effective but it's very strange and takes time to get used to.

At first I was hesitant to read the story,but I did and you found a way to hook me. However, the rawness of it and the lack of any positive emotion (at this stage I'm guessing) puts me in the worst mood and this will have to be something I read in stages.

I mean, the dad makes me sick, and I wanna slap the girl so she comes to her senses and stops feeling guilty. I invest too much emotion in what I read so this is a highly frustrating story.

I do like it though, if that word can even be applied to something like this, and it's definitely something that's not very common on this site.

I loved this story :) your style of writing is very powerful. I was able to see things from Kayla's point of view, I could understand her and what she was doing and why she was afraid.

Overall, a great story :)

Keep writing.

Your writing... it's different.

I like it.

I'm finding it difficult to come up with something that can accurately describe how this story has made me feel. I suppose that the best I can do is to tell you that it is possibly the most beautiful thing I've ever read. You truly have a gift.

Dear God, this story was a rare gem to find in an otherwise bleak existence of so-called prose. I loved every second of this story. The execution of this story was exquisite. I loved the fact that we didn't know her name until near the very end and even after we learn it, we do not know the name of her "savior/lover." The sheer mystery of it all made me click rapidly to the next chapter, trying to find something, any kind of answer. This story left my soul open but at the same time filled in the missing gaps. The erratic time gaps also added something to the chaos in the heroine's life, as if she is stuck in the past while still somehow connected to the present, and can never grasp a future. Dear God, this story was simply beautiful.

There were little to no typos, grammar/spelling errors in this piece, which to me, help make it flow seamlessly. I don't think there are any other words to say about this, without repeating myself. It is definitely a story worthy of being on my favorites list.

If you are considering getting this published, I think that this would stand a great chance of actually succeeding. This is a rare story that actually has substance and shows a deep reality while playing with the surreal. Please keep up the great work.

I wasn't expected that last twist-not so suddenly, at least. There's no doubt that this is beautiful. I felt the ending a little rushed, and I was hoping for a little more catharsis in the last chapter, but endings are indeed the hardest, and your execution throughout the whole makes up for it. Ah, this really is great. Two thumbs up, Natalie.

Still intending to publish this?

Funny how we relate freedom to animals and other things of nature. I guess it's a human characteristic. I do the same.

This story is very daring, but you've executed it masterfully. The breaks in the story aren't confusing at all, and I think that's pretty impressive with so much going on at much.

Anyway, I'm still astounded, still addicted. You're a goddess.