I love love love the structure of this piece. The ways you are able to relate the two different situations are amazing. And the gradual change from focusing on the test to focusing on the night in question is really realistic and helps develop the character.

You may want to italicize the answers to help distinguish between the actual actions and her musing.

You rock, man. Although, i do have to point out that in some places it doesn't really flow very well and it sounds kind of crap. I think you should edit it a few more times. But other than that, it was really fun to read and you should post some more stories soon. Maybe you could try a longer one...?

Adorable.

Seriously. I haven't read something that sweet in ages. It's awesomeness. :)

And I loved the way you wrote it. It's seriously witty and entertaining. When you started with the question, I was a bit "What the fuck" but it was amazing to read it in that form :)

Loved it :)

Thanks for sharing. keep it up :)

Ahh! This is adorable. I love how you had her answer all the questions on her biology test in that way. It's so funny! This was really sweet, and I love the ending. I just love everything about it, actually. Really well done! (:

this was really cute! and really creative and original. i really liked it. :)

OMGG. you're like the greatest of all time. i loved this. sweet and witty and wonderfully creative. i mean, if the story was told at the party...well, you'd find a way to make it great, i'm sure, but we've seen that so many times and we would probably get less of this awesome narration/insight/HAHAH MRS. HUMPHREY. best name ever. just sounds so...senile.

and yeah. so... great way to tell this story. never thought bio could be so romantic. THIS WAS REVOLUTIONARY. LOVED IT. LOVE YOU.

;)becky

Wow! This was so creative and amazing! lol hahaha the funny thing is i knew like all the real answers, from my year 11 preliminary year, aghh i'm doing year 12 - HSC year now... i dunno if you know what that is, i live in Australia and our year 12 and its exams is called the HSC course...

anyways...! wow made me smile, was so damn cute :)

That was genius really...i loved it!

I love this story! I think it's funny that all her test answers are about him X] I actually know a guy named Calvin and when I read this I immediately thought of him...and I'm kicking myself for it. I used to like him but I've fallen hard for my other guy friend...(note my author name). Anyway this was an awesome, sweet story.

Keep writing what you're writing

-HoplesslyInLoveWithHim

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You are my hero. I love you SO much right now :D!

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:O You shall now be on my favorite authors list. This was so cute! It was... so... ARGH! i cant even find words to comprehend! u my hero

This girl makes me happy. 3 She's so funny. And him. He's cool. You should write more about them.

That was definitely one of the most creative ways to write a story I've ever read. Good job! :)

Lol, the nerd in me ...was actually able to answer all those questions..

But, I like how each question was some how relatable and I'm going to assume it was Calvin who kissed her _

CUTE!

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wow...Iv never found a more amazing test paper! lolz

it was really awesoome how you linked everything..and told the story through the test paper :) loved it!

Definitely the most original thing I've read on here!

It's so great how you tie everything in together with the science questions. Through the test, you get to see what was happening that night, and I really like it. *Applause* Congratulations! This is what I call a masterfully tasteful piece of writing.

I really enjoyed it! I wonder what she got on that test, lol

this is really great and made me smile