Reviews for What is family? |
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![]() ![]() ![]() "Our son!" hehehe thanks for the update even though it's a bit belated! *waves* |
![]() ![]() Loved it, can't wait for the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw...that was sweet and I really like how they didn't go too fast and go all the way to penetration. You did good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cause you were worried. You did really well with this first sex scene. It is believeable and sexy. Not to much smut, but it fits into the story very well. |
![]() ![]() love that they finally admitted it to each other, can't wait for the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i liked this capter and i cant wait for the next one...:D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I would love to see the night from Richards point. And i would like to know what took him so long to answerd to Adam. Didn't he see how desperate Adam was? |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was great! I'm glad that they got things settled between them. I think it would be great if you split the next chapter between them and do both POVs. Maybe start out with Adam's POV to show how frightened he is because it's his first time being with anyone, much less a man. Then do Richard's POV to show his excitement and worry as well as his possessive and dominant feelings. Is this his first time with a man as well? If you're going to make it realistic then it shouldn't be all peaches and cream and pleasure. There should be some awkward moments, fumbling and pain the first time. Richard seems like the kind of guy to plan and research everything, so it would be cute if Adam walked in on Richard researching gay sex on the internet and got all flustered while Richard invites him to read along. During sex I would just flip back and forth between POVs to get the entire experience of both characters. Sorry for rambling, but you asked and I wanted to help. Hope I did help a bit! |
![]() ![]() ![]() WOOHOO SMUTT! I mean I hope there is in the next chapter P thanks for the update! I was a little sad because Brian still hasn't talked and I want him to D but I know it has to be a super duper awesome moment so I guess I can wait P not that I really had a choice can't wait for the next chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw..that's much better! I'm not angry with Richard any longer...he was just scared. I hope something really good happens next and Adam forgives him. I'd love to see them start down the path to happiness soon! Thanks for the notification and the new chapter! *hug* |
![]() ![]() ![]() *fangasms* So cute! Hope they make up soon . you awesome! thanx for the update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love these fast updates. Thank you. The photos of you characters are great. Even if i imagine Adam a little darker, they both look how i imagined them. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ohh, poor Adam, but i am sure he hasn't meant it that way. Nice chapter anyway, hot and i am so excited to see what is happening next. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow! Poor Adam...I feel so sorry for him. When I finished reading I actually had a tear running down my cheek! Why did Richard push him away? He initiated the kiss and got Adam all worked up, so why did he freak and hurt Adam so badly? Hurry and update again soon please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() NU! it was going so well too! what is Richard thinking? Thanks for the awesome update, I'm sad faced at at Adam for taking a cab . can't wait for next ch!~ |