|Reviews for regret|
| deefective chapter 1 . 10/17/2009
Hm, well I do like the line;
"Something's gnawing inside of me"
It lends a sort of gruesome imagery to the emotion you're trying to describe, which in turns sets the tone for the rest of the piece.
What I didn't like was the repetition of the word feeling/feelings/feel. Sometimes it can work but in this case it didn't. It made the piece feel cluttered and kind of bland, as if you couldn't find another word to use. Other than that, nicely done.
-Dee, from the Review Marathon.
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