Aw! I love this story! Cute :D :D

hahah aw, this was adorable! it just happened so fast, it was like woah!

I think the tiniest bit of confusion that you could have is because you change the view points, and that kind of throws people off when you don't label it. that's the only thing i really have to say, the rest is great!

this story is really good, but what happened to Ray moving? Where was he moving to? Is he not going to move anymore? I think that you need closure on that moving thing more. :):)

Argh! I love it but I hate it when the issue that caused the initial problem isn't resolved. What's was his excuse for not going to the concert with her? I'm sorry but it is a pet peeve of mine when you it just ends like that. Otherwise, great story :)

Thumbs UP !

aw cute story. it made my cry!

I thought at first that they won't end up together. Btw, awesome story!)

loved it..

He he. This was so cute! I loved it...and the length was perfect too.

Great job! :P

All of your stories are so cute...

Ri

aww this was so cute

i loved it )

It's sweet, :D All guys are dumb, apparently.. LOL.

AW~

the alternating perspectives worked wonderfully!

actually...your writing made the story come to life.

i loved it!

This one is definitely better than the unedited one, good job! They both made me smile, but this one gave me butterflies :)

i like this ending better

but its still really quick

keep writting