Reviews for A Dark Fable
dreamshell chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
I liked this. It told a story, flowed (mostly) well, and fit the fable motif. A few things;

“Grieve," not "greave."

“Wild,” not "wiled." (Unless you're being clever with words there.)

I think "woe" rather than "sorrow” might flow a bit better.

“Upon,” not "apon."

Nice poem. ;)
WutNow chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
I'm a huge fan of those who are first starting out here on ficpress :) I'm happy to be the first to review your work.

First of all, I have no idea why this poem of yours hasn't recieved as many reviews. I found it interesting and complex. Man vs. beast and it goes to show you that neither can win. I like the tension between the animals and the humans, the hardship of unity. I admired how you delivered each line, each significant and descriptive. The poem really packs a punch.

Anyway, bat up more poems soon :)

P.S- If you have time, it would be awesome if you review one of my works too :). I'd love to hear from you.

Take care