|Reviews for Alone|
| Narq chapter 1 . 10/18/2009
This is so sad but so wonderful! It's not just a string of pretty words, but this really does mean something!
One suggestion is that you could be more daring with your sentence structures. For the last sentence, for example, "Don't forget my small, tiny voice, please". YOu could try, "Don't forget my small/tiny voice/please" and (I know FP doesn't allow this, but in your word document) make the word size smaller and smaller, like that person who's talking is saying it quieter and quieter.