Reviews for Emerald Eyes a Demons LovePart II Pedes Caecus
AkeraWriterOfTheNight chapter 40 . 10/22/2012
Aaaawww! I love it. Do they have kids? Man! They are so perfict for eachother! Inwish I could find my pull!
AkeraWriterOfTheNight chapter 1 . 10/18/2012
You confused me with the first one. I did not realize that it was the original story. Its kinda making the this version hard to read.
Nara chapter 40 . 5/8/2012
Love the first 35 chapters and um not do much the end but over all great job just. saying but u might want to consider getting a beta because u have a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, love it any way
Pumpkin.-.-.Kween chapter 40 . 12/16/2010
SO I dont like to comment until I read a whole story, I've done so and here goes...


#1 Rewrites UGH.. seriously? I hate that with an extreme passion. It's the reason I only select and read "complete" stories. This story is not complete.

#2 I understand you are "Pissed" from the twilight comparisons but in all honesty, it IS very similar and at times I thought I was reading a fanfiction. Not a diss, I'm just saying.. it IS.

#3 Am I the only one who thinks it's crazy to willingly WANT to become a demon? Now look I AM Christian but not a holy roller type... but come on... I don't care if homeboy is the hottest guy I've ever seen, I don't care if I get feel good lovey dovey feelings from him or have some supernatural pull.. heck I don't even care if mother f'er ejaculates $100 bills! I am NOT sleeping with him if the consequence of doing so means I'd be a demon/damned! *looks around* am I the only one who is verbally saying "Oh hell no girl, don't do it!" while reading the scene in the plane? I can understand wanting the characters to finally share a physcial love but if that means she's gonna be a demon? NO! ( can I just also say, I wouldn't mind if I didn't have to read Gods name in vain anymore either :) just saying, I cringe inside when I see that. )

#4: The fact that EVERYONE in her life transitions into demons is far fetched. Seriously EVERYONE? Her best friend/sister, her two other friends, her best "boy" friend, her father... it's a bit lazy as a writter because we are already attatched to those characters and to have us have a "family" feel towards the Linx is easier when you throw in characters we already like.. plus seeing something so far fetched and unrealistic takes credibility away from you as a writter. You're better then that.


You are very very very talented. The story you have thought up is entertaining and captivating. You have a way of drawing the reader in. Your writting gives a reader a feel of attatchment to the characters (which of course is why it sucks to see rewrites). I could feel the "pull" between the two main characters which is very important because emotions are not easy to convey through words (the saying "actions speak louder then words" is based on that). I found myself wondering what would come next. You have huge potential IF you can think the story through to the end prior to releasing it to the public because as you know, it's very frustrating to have rewrites. Thanks for the entertainment, hope to see a end to the story.
sexyanonymous24 chapter 38 . 12/16/2010
Huh? I'm confused. What happened to Stephanie? How did Dylan and Silver get together? Lol maybe I skipped a chap.

Anyways, who! Loving the sequel right now. Glad to know Sarah has her memory back! :)

Definitely loving the action and suspense!
Rae chapter 25 . 12/10/2010
Listen. You've got something good here. But every time I see "eye's" or "your" or "perkiest" (when it's Percoset), I die a little on the inside. If it weren't for the compelling story, I'd have quit reading this long ago because of all the mistakes. Let me proofread and edit this for you. And since it's complete, get rid of the Author's Notes. You've got 122 reviews (me making 123), so obviously people like it.

Email me.

janelle chapter 1 . 12/5/2010
hey i love ur story i just wanted to know when the new chapter coming out
Wade0112 chapter 3 . 11/11/2010
Never saw this coming. I love how you let it pick up.
Wade0112 chapter 1 . 11/10/2010
I like it chapter 28 . 8/22/2010
good story -
samlovesyou chapter 35 . 8/16/2010
i love it ...jus waitin finish da sequel!
FM Radio chapter 13 . 8/4/2010
I keep seeing similarities between this and Twilight. I don't mean to offend you, but that's what I'm noticing...
bouttellom chapter 35 . 7/14/2010
talk bout ur cliff hangers...i havent commented on any of the other chapters cuz i didnt feel like writing just reading this! lol. its so good. oh and completely nothing like twilight. i mean there were some simularites but who cares. im like a huge twilight fan and dude, this is better then stephenie meyer. and sean is like nothing like edward! and if this was like a twilight copy then where jacob? lol. well i guess in the saga 2 this chris counts as it. i dont like chris :( im a little dissapointed in the other saga thing. lol i know i already said that in the other review but still...not happy. still this was amazing. lol, i left this up on my pc and my dad was reading a part from it and it almost gave hima heart attack! lol. great dialog. fantastic characters and you made sean sound really hott! me likey :) plz keep writing on the other book. possibly kill chris or something and let sarah and sean still be togetheer in the end! plz let them be really happy 2gether! i like a happy ending :)
Titilayo chapter 35 . 6/2/2010
SCHATZI87 chapter 6 . 5/15/2010
I really love this story so far! & you are doing fabulous! so keep your head up chica! remember you are always your worst critic! I can't wait to see what happens! Thank you for taking me away. have a great weekend :D
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