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![]() ![]() ![]() interesting start, can't wait for more |
![]() ![]() ![]() It's good, overall pretty well written and a good story line going so far. It feels a bit rushed, possibly not enough detail about your characters or environment. You seem to concentrate too much on dialog and something I can't place, it's there I just couldn't tell you what exactly. Overall you have a good idea and starting point, but take it slower, it feels rushed like you're trying to get this accomplished quickly because you spent so much time on it. But overall it works, and I'll be looking forward to the next chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i enjoy this immensly. |