|Reviews for Goal!|
| czarina chapter 11 . 11/26/2009
first things first, i like your story very much and i hope you will continue with these story despite the criticism you have.
second, practice makes it perfect...so continuing writing in English and soon you write perfectly in english...
looking forward to your next update in English...
take care.. :D
| SilentShadow91 chapter 11 . 11/26/2009
i like ur story and most people can't be ur critics because everyone that is here is just practicing making their writting better... and if u want me to help u with the translating to spanish thing let me know
| Graphomanic chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
You know I don't think your English is that bad...Or it is my English I should worry about then?(Probably not the case though...English is my mother tongue. Maybe it's my weirdly literate brain this is correcting it unconsciously and I don't really notice?)
But I would like to tell you that I love your story!
Even though I didn't even realize that you were talking about Football(Soccer)! Not North American football.(I'm Canadian.) I finally realized it when you mentioned that British soccer(football) dude who's married to a former Spice Girl...
| twilight24 chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
haha, omg, Nina's hilarious! I was laughing throughout the whole scene with Nina in it!I cant believe she actually told Jerome...I wonder how he'll take it! And that little remark about how Jerome hoped Isle wasnt his sister was cute. It made me squeal with happiness...I know I'm weird. But it was so cute! And he cared!
oh, and you totally shouldn't stop writing this story! I love it! And your English is not so bad that you can't understand it. It's actually pretty good considering you're not native to it. So yeah, keep writing :)
| Need the happy ending chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
Please continue this story!
I just found it today and I already love it. And I am very impressed with your English. Yes there a few places where you leave out a word or mix them up (IE you say watching when it should be looking at), but you still write better than many of the writers who speak English from the start. All you need is someone to edit and you'll be fine.
| iman1234 chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
this is ausume!
| E chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
I think you write just fine. I'm glad you are writing in English because then I can enjoy it! Overall the story is good. I love how Isle interacts with everyone, some friendships, especially the one with Nina, seem slightly rushed but I think under the circumstance it could happen!
| Xiaolu chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
Don't give up, okay? I'm really admiring you for doing what you do. As you, my native tongue isn't English and when I try to write in English, it comes out as... flat and boring. Your story, though, is nice. Of course, it's not perfect but everyone can improve. You could try to get a beta (they have good ones on fp) !
Honestly, I (and I'm sure others as well) really like your story.
Nice chapter, anyway. I'm glad she didn't quit!
| Its.Not.Me.Its.You chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
cant wait for more!
hope you update soon!
happy gobble gobble (turkey)day incase you dont update before then
| Ishita2u chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
Pls... do continue
There's nothing wrong in writing in ur native tongue... i mean English is my third language n i dont mind reading or writing in it... n believe me ur writing isnt bad as u have been lead to believe... n who ever tells u to stop writing in this language tell them to take their advice shove it in the ass...
stop minding wat ppl say... thats all i can suggest .
i cant force u to do anything u dont want... but plss do continue...
N to all those ppl who r advising her to stop writing in Eng. Plss she invites constructive criticism and not discouragement.
| sonia chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
You really shouldn't be discouraged. Your english is really good and the storyline is wonderful. I've been waiting for an update for some time now and the only suggestion I have is to post fast! I want to know what's going to happen! You're very talented - keep up the amazing work!
| Kid of Colors chapter 10 . 11/25/2009
I really don't think you have so many mistakes where it takes away interest from the story. Whoever believes a few mistakes makes it less interresting must ba a grammar nazi or something...please continue your story!
| akaCHEEKS chapter 9 . 11/21/2009
haha she's not going to leave. we all know that already!
| Ck90 chapter 9 . 11/19/2009
NO! BAD ILSE!
| ReaderofSorts chapter 9 . 11/17/2009
Hey, I love this story ! The plot is really developing well ! Update soon please :)x