|Reviews for An Urban Indian's Farewell|
| killMeN0w chapter 1 . 6/18/2012
This was so...vauge..lols. For me it was. Somehow, I got the idea of a subtle little relationship ending, with the one party moving back to the things they used to do -and love-before the relationship started, things that they couldn't do when the relationship had.
That's the thing about poetry, whatever perceives to you. Though, I'm curious, what's it REALLY about?
| Fresh Wildflower chapter 1 . 4/19/2010
The poem feels like one would read at a Indian's modern funeral, was that your plan? All in all, a good poem.
| sophiesix chapter 1 . 3/23/2010
I agree with Eternal Skies, the rhyme scheme was really distracting. That said, you had some lovely images towards the end, my favourite being "Where knife winds blow/With blades of snow" and the ending itself was great. I'd like to see the rhythm and imagery freed from the rhyme scheme and given full run :) feels like he's still trapped
| J.A. Fletcher chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
Yes, unfortunately not a picture that most Indians will see in these times. It was a great poem. Very good work.
| Icyfire4w5 chapter 1 . 1/23/2010
I think that the ending is kinda bittersweet. On one hand, I can imagine that guy riding into the sunset. On the other hand, I sense that he has experienced too much unpleasantness, such as prejudices. I suppose that his heart is wounded, but I hope that such wounds will be healed.
| wo bu ai ni le chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
Aw, good luck.
I liked the rhyme scheme, it sounds like riding and riding and riding :D
| natmarie chapter 1 . 11/22/2009
Good imagery and nice off-beat rhyme scheme.
| letyoursoultakeflight chapter 1 . 11/11/2009
Aww, very well done!
| Eternal Skies chapter 1 . 10/31/2009
the ending was pretty good. the rhyming was a bit distracting cuz it was impossible to just ignore, but the meaning behind the words and the things they present are simple and clear.
| Mirabella chapter 1 . 10/30/2009
Going home to nature; i like it. :)