Reviews for embrace
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/19/2010
I just read the haiku with the street lamps in it so this is an interesting next piece to read.

Anyway, I like the piece. I think the little details like the geese and the streetlights were nice. They helped me create and image of the scene in my mind. It was also really sweet.

I loved your word choices. You described the two people's love really well. I love "mischievous kisses" and "laughter fills our lugs" and "tumble"

Well done.

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a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 10/31/2009
i like how the short lines give it an open, freely-flowing feel. i especially like the cute innocence of "memories / or rolling down hills / and mischievous kisses"

nice job.

the only thing i didn't like was the ending. it didn't seem as strong as the rest of the piece, but maybe that's just me.