|Reviews for Mischief Night|
| meowmie chapter 1 . 11/5/2012
| The Autumn Queen chapter 1 . 8/28/2012
I don't particularly like the way you've introduced the events of this story because the entire first segment is a little too straight-forward; you're presenting us with bare facts that doesn't really invite the reader to read more closely. It's largely objective - not really inviting towards emotion, and that becomes very important when you get to that final scene.
I like the almost nonchalant way you've presented the final scene though, even if I still feel it could have benefited from a buildup of emotion, because it dives into the darker emotions around such festivities - nothing like the "OMG I just saw a body - cue screaming", but rather a mix of innocence and loss thereof nicely knitted together.
| slave to the voices chapter 1 . 4/7/2011
You have a great knack for these legend shorts. Nice work!
| Melissa chapter 1 . 5/17/2010
OMG your a great story teler I bet your fun at sleepovers and campfires hehe and of course Halloween! AWSOME!