|Reviews for conquering tug of war|
| nickyO chapter 1 . 11/3/2009
Heartfelt and well wrought.
| Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 11/3/2009
how much of change
is that of me that
to see harvest moon’s
plying well-worn routes
that lead to always
pointing just one face
visage with a dark side
amidst all life’s shifts
| Renami chapter 1 . 11/2/2009
I don't usually like reviewing poems, but I still read them and to me it seems there are several different ways to make a poem a "good" poem.
Your poem is good because it is easy to read and doesn't get stuck and the way you don't put too much of yourself in the poem even though speaking of your own observations.
On the other hand I think you could have spent more time on it and think it more through for yourself before actually writing.
Right now it seems to me that you went more for the easy to read and sounding good part instead of actually concentrating on your point and trying to get your meaning through.
Don't get me wrong, your poem isn't bad, but I might not remember what it was about when I finish writing this review. You should go for stronger impression. I am only giving you advice because I think you will improve.