Reviews for conquering tug of war
nickyO chapter 1 . 11/3/2009
Heartfelt and well wrought.
Manuel Fajar chapter 1 . 11/3/2009
misplaced things

displaced thoughts

effaced feelings

replaced loves

how much of change

is that of me that

still remains

to see harvest moon’s

solitary quest

plying well-worn routes

that lead to always

pointing just one face

visage with a dark side

unexplored

unimagined

amidst all life’s shifts
Renami chapter 1 . 11/2/2009
I don't usually like reviewing poems, but I still read them and to me it seems there are several different ways to make a poem a "good" poem.

Your poem is good because it is easy to read and doesn't get stuck and the way you don't put too much of yourself in the poem even though speaking of your own observations.

On the other hand I think you could have spent more time on it and think it more through for yourself before actually writing.

Right now it seems to me that you went more for the easy to read and sounding good part instead of actually concentrating on your point and trying to get your meaning through.

Don't get me wrong, your poem isn't bad, but I might not remember what it was about when I finish writing this review. You should go for stronger impression. I am only giving you advice because I think you will improve.

Good Luck!

-Mari