Reviews for The Mating
Taren Elle chapter 26 . 12/4/2009
Yes letting nature take its course, I love it lol...Hm Marla on the other hand is plotting I can feel it, that's why she made sure Elise went out with Bryan which I don't think is such a great idea lol. I don't think Kane's going to like this IF he finds out.
Destiny1406 chapter 26 . 12/4/2009
update soon!

Haybell :)
Destiny1406 chapter 25 . 12/4/2009
oh my goodness... when are they going to blood bond? i'm almost getting tired of waiting. i though it was going to happen on their run, but guess not! Update soon

Haybell :)
xoxokristen chapter 25 . 12/4/2009
wonderful story! can't wait for the next chapter!
illegalmoonshine chapter 4 . 12/4/2009
I couldn't just pack away my life like that. That's horrible.

I rushed through the hapter but it was still excellent as usual. :D

I wonder how far I can get this weekend if I only sleep the bare minimum.


I plan on finding out.

lionandthelamblove7 chapter 25 . 12/3/2009
My goodness! I am in love with your story! It is astounding! I love your writing, excellent! I love your characters so much.

At the beginning I have to admit that I pitied Elise for having to be taken into marriage without her literal consent. I was feeling rather awkward with her when mating with Kane for the first time, I seriously blushed!

But I soon warmed up to Kane. His character is just so, how should I put this, inviting and kind. I can't bring myself to be mad at such a sweet man.

Oh, when you introduced the pack, well, I loved them all!

I immediately tuned into the attitude that Marla was omitting. I just can't get how Kane doesn't see it, but I guess that's men for you, always so blind in these circumstances.

I just know she has something in story to totally destroy Kane and Elise's relationship. And they were getting so close, too!

I love this story and can not wait until you update! Your one amazing writer and I look forward to reading more of your work!

Sparxz chapter 25 . 12/3/2009
You are an amazing writer. While I'm reading your story, I find it easy for me to relate to the characters (especially Elise) and everything seems to come to life. I'm hating Marla so much right now but at the same time I love her. It's the classic love/hate relationship anyone should get from the villian because without them the story wouldn't have the dramatic effect it needs. Your style of writing is inspiring and I only hope, with practice and more education, I'll be able to write as remarkably as you are. I'm loving your story and can't wait for the next update.
cytl101 chapter 25 . 12/3/2009
happy Marla is creeping me out again...

great job :)
anonymous8D chapter 25 . 12/3/2009
Oh No!

She didn't tell him

I see trouble ahead.

Tawny Owl chapter 6 . 12/3/2009
I want to know what CDs and books Kane has! You can tell alot about a person from that. Well, f they actually read the books they buy anyway...

I suspect that Kane ignoring Elise is not a smart move. That inquiring mind is bound to find things to keep itself busy. Liek digging for dirt, or maybe if she's bored enough taking out all the CDs and putting them back in the wrong case. Hm.

How does a werewolf pack become well set financially? What do they do?

Being in shock makes sense - although we have had flashes of her fighting back - like testing Kane when they went running, and asking him about his scar. And now leaving the room - which hey, she has every right to do seeing as this is her home now.

Kane does seem rather too good to be true though. Very understanding, which is nice, but there's got to be more complications some where.

I liked the comment about Carrie whelping soon. For a moment is seemed almost derogatory until i remembered that she'd refered to her and Bryan being pups together.

I'd still like to see more description of teh background. You kind of mention what things are liek but when we first see them, but it's very regimented and no textures or colours or anything. Then it seems to be forgotten. It makes it seem like teh characters aren't really rooted in the setting.

Good charcters though.
Tawny Owl chapter 5 . 12/3/2009
I liked this chapter because it put everything in context a bit more, which was helpful. So, forgive me for asking some stupid questions earlier on.

I didn't think it moved too slowly because we had the trepidation of meeting the in laws. And I think Elise may have some one who wants her position after all. I wonder what Kane thinks about that - although he seems mated to his pack before anyone else, and it strikes me that it will be easier for him to make the necessary sacrifices in order to care for them.

The stilted conversation in the truck really helped to set the atmosphere as well, although I felt it could have been contratsed more with the chaos of the three ringed circus at the alpha's house. It was kind o implied that there were lots of people there, but i didn't really feel the confusion or the movement - does that make any sense?

I know you're a good way into this, but if it's still useful I don't think Elise is too annoying - she seems scared, and unsure, but there's a practicality to her in that she seems focused on making the best of her situation. And at least she isn't sobbing over Bryan the whole time - although she seems to have forgotten him lately. As for Kane he seems all calm and collecte don the outside, but I'm not sure he's letting Elise close enough for us to get to know him better - not really a bad thing if that's how you want it to be. Given that the bit about the fight was handled well (just the facts) which seemed in keeping with the impression I've got of Kane. If tehre's more stuff we need to know I'm sure it can be leaked out later.

The sex wasn't too much - this is rated M, after all - and although it seemed a little bit sterile that worked because they had only just met. I did like the way that you balanced teh fact that Elise did sort of enjoy it, but was still a bit freaked out by the whole thing. Her attitude seemed, urm, realistic I guess.
Tawny Owl chapter 4 . 12/3/2009
For some reason the idea of a werewolf getting killed in a traffic accident made me laugh. I take it the alpha was in the car and not hit by it when in wolf form? Sorry, it was just such a ridiculous image.

And the scar - surely Elise has seen it when they mated, even though it probably wasn't high on her list of things to be worried about.

I like the idea that they've evolved beyond the fighting as well. Your werewolves seem very sophisticated, and it make sme wonder why the humans are so keen to hunt them. And yet they still have the mentality of the strongest leads and they all obey that. Interesting balance: it makes me want to see how well the system works.

I'm also curious to know moe about the cabins in the woods and what they look like. And the diary seemed significant.
Tawny Owl chapter 3 . 12/3/2009
Ah, with the phasing - how does that work. Is it just a shimmer and their wolves? And how does that work with the clothes? Sorry, I'm nosey about things like that.

I liked the way she was testing him, and his comment about keeping up with her no matter what she dished out was good. They both seem very strong and opinionated and if they ever disagree on something there could be sparks there. I hope there are. It'd be fun to see them argue when they know each other better.
Tawny Owl chapter 2 . 12/3/2009
Oh, Bryan has just lost serious points. More concerned about what he wanted than whether she was alright or not and backing down from Kane without even a snarl. Shocking! Or maybe I'm being unfair because I enjoy writing all that alpha male rubbish. Even so I think I'm now supporting Kane. In fact I don't thinkk you even told us what Bryan looked like, and considering Elise was pining for him last chapter he didn't make much of an impression.

Although the tactless mention of heat cycles made me feel for Elise, although it also made me chuckle quite a bit as well.

I liked the description at the beginning of teh chapter with the orange painted trees. It would have been nice to see that through the rest as well becasue it felt like the background kind of got forgotten when the dialogue started.
Tawny Owl chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
Finally got round to returning. Hooray!

I liked the cyclical nature of the chapter - setting the scene with the aftermath. It's an interetsting set up you've got here, with the humans on the boundaries and the time honoured tradition of blood on the bed sheets, and the double standards of virginity - I take it Kane wasn't because he seemed to know what he was doing!

You captured the awkwardness for both of them really well, and although it was from Elise's perspective I felt sympathy for Kane as well. It'll be interetsing to see where you take all the relationships as well. The kind of arthur/lance/gwen thing you've got here puts me in mind of a historical romance. Sort of.

The shoe on the other foot being an uncomfortable fit made me laugh. I would have liked more observations like that, even though the content wasn't exactly cheerful. Sometimes things like that though make situations seem more real because you identify with the characters more.
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