I had no idea this story was set in the future. D: Guess I just wasn't paying enough attention. :P
A lot of new info in this chapter. My brain is dead. XD
"Deutschland" When I try to say it, I end up going 'Doucheland" ._. And I hate myself for it.
Magness and Dwynt? Everyone's names are so unique and interesting here. :D I liiiiike.
"'Natalia" Instantly thought of Nutella. O W O
No issues with grammar/spelling from briefly scanning through this time! :D
Keep up the good work!

Ahh, so much army lingo. I'm not used to it. XD
It's pretty interesting so far. Are all these characters original? :o That's a lot. You has a smart. :D
I should probably read the rest whilst I'm more awake.
Just found a few things here:
["No, sir", Private Jackson answered,]
Comma in wrong place. :3
[Jenkins, like many soldiers stationed on the small outpost, has been worried ever since the rebel attacks became more frequent.]
The other parts of the paragraph seem to be in past tense, so the 'has' should be a 'had', I think?
["So, what now, sir."]
It's a question, right? Question mark?

Hey, sorry I haven't dropped by in a while to read the story. I'm liking it, since Sy-Fy is in a way my thing. Keep writing!

-Miss LeSummer

Once again, entrapping. I like how the 'rebels' are slowly being developed into an organized fighting force as we learn more about them. Very well done.

I also like the double chapter post. :D

Well written. You embodied one of those hopeless struggles of war quite well. Looking forward to the next section.

I feel really sadistic by saying this, but I love it! Keep it up again!

Nice job yet again! But I want to know what happened with those 'force users' and the navy. ;) Entrapping.

Well done man! I love it. I like the progression and incorporation of extra characters like the boy and the tortured guy (cant recall his name). Those parts were almost perfect in my view. A few points (like the original invasion by the rebels)could have been described or drawn out a little more; and a few feelings elaborated upon (like the boys sadistic joy or the aunts hurt and confusion) but its still great. I would pay to read a full version of this I think.

Grade "A" job.

oh the joy of the ground ponder the writting will keep you entertained with very good flow discription and action you will have fun reading this story so have fun

for a space opra this will hold you down to the page it is well written ,has belivable people, worth your time to read so get reading and I hope you have as much fun as I have.

I really like this! I had to leave a while ago and couldn't finish the first chapter. Keep writing!

This is really good! I can't wait to read more!