Hi! I like the story, and where it's going. The short chapters appeal to me, but there were some mild typos or grammatical errors that caught my attention. It was an easy read though, and a fun one.

Wow... This story is so interesting! Keep it up, I can't wait to find out what happens next. This is probably the most intriguing story you've written so far. You know, you're a pretty darn good writer yourself. Have a great weekend, and I'll see you on Monday. :)

What a cliffie! Can't wait for the next chapter. :)

Hmm... Now it's getting really interesting. Do keep up the great writing. :)

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This is quite an intriguing story. I wonder what happens next. :) Keep writing!