|Reviews for Imagination|
| Elber of Torou chapter 1 . 11/23/2009
This is a very well-written story. The whole idea of jumping back between make-believe and real life, like in "Rugrats", is quite neat. You capture the story pretty well, too.
Just a couple things: it gets a bit tricky to remember who some of the secondary characters are, especially towards the end. But since Mott and Parker and Martin are really the only important characters, that's not really such a problem.
At one point, you've put "your" instead of "you're" (when Mott tells Parker that he's still commander, I think).
Otherwise, this is a really well-done job.