Reviews for Heroine
InfinitePrincessx3 chapter 1 . 5/14/2010
Thats what I call 'Pretty Writing' xD

Great Job, keep it up,

Kalista Jia chapter 1 . 1/5/2010
I am speechless before this poem. It is simply amazing!

People passing don’t give a glance,

She soars into the sky.

Really, just WOW. The imagery is really cool! Love love love!
Melanie Layugan chapter 1 . 12/29/2009
Hmm.. I think it's the last line. Like the whole flow is thrown off at the ending, but at the same time its very... hard to describe, it's something. I'm sure you'll think of something that will finish it nicely :) But I love how you used the phoenix as a metaphor. You go girl :)
FelleLLoyd chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
Honestly, I don't find anything missing. I feel the ending gives opportunity for thought. Awesome work, love it.
letyoursoultakeflight chapter 1 . 12/16/2009
Her wings beat to the time.

She flies by me and I don’t breathe,

- love that part :)
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 11/12/2009
The poem was really good until the last two lines where I felt it ended too suddenly. Keep working on it though :) (And I really did enjoy the poem!) Write on!

~Anna~ _
Pink-Amethyst chapter 1 . 11/10/2009
hmm. i like it, but it's lacking a little...feeling? maybe more descriptions, or going into more depth about how it makes you feel. empowered? awestruck? something?

haha i like it though.

xoxo, Cassie
salsalsally chapter 1 . 11/8/2009
I like the feelings you are trying to capture in this poem, maybe the ending/last line needs to be re-written? or re-worded? Its a nice poem!