|Reviews for Leave me alone|
| Brinneh chapter 1 . 8/4/2005
Some of your rhyming seems forced. And there is too much repitition. Don't get me wrong, repitition is a great poetic device, it can be very effective. But repitition for repitition's sake is very repetitive. Do you get my drift?Despite that, you got your message across (even if you could have done it in fewer words), so I guess the poem is ok, in that respect. A word of advice, though-don't do something, like rhyme or repitition-just to do it. Do it if it works for the poem, so that the poem is better because that particulare device is in I was at least a bit helpful. I didn't mean to sound so harsh.~Nea
| Kittioto chapter 1 . 8/2/2002
LOL, that's how I felt this evening cooking up this new soup recipe! Dude, I was sooo cranky... but then, when I WAS alone, I got frustrated with myself. I uh... over-think things, it's a real problem. _** So I wrote a poem to vent. ... It helps...! -_- I am sooo pathetic... kay... I'm off to go analyze something now...
| WalkingOnWater chapter 1 . 5/24/2002
hmmmm...this had an interesting approach on actually a few subjects, like hatred, distrust, anger...its very interesting, it made me think for the first time in a while, lol, well, great job
| jessiCA3 chapter 1 . 11/12/2001
i need to be alone sometimes too.*
| Survivor chapter 1 . 5/8/2001
I think it's too simple..
try to make it in "stanza"
| barry chapter 1 . 5/5/2001
| Manon chapter 1 . 5/4/2001
Well, fine, I will.