hmm... interesting ...

Ooh... and the plot thiockens.. :D

they are going on a 'date' or atleast thats what i think anyways

He is making progress.. :D Yay! How long do you think this story will be?

yay! she's warming up to him. i just kinda wish she didnt forgive rebecca. she didnt deserve it...

wow what a bitch! i never liked her form the start anyways!

This is an awesome story! I think your doing a great job, while I like longer chapters, I like sooner updates more!

So just got done reading chapter two and I like it so far. If you're thinking about continuing it you DEFINITLY should! It's good so far. I like Maddie. I'm kind of like her with my writing. But I love to show the critics of fictionpress..they're awesome with their criticism. Anyways, awesome story. FINISH IT! :)

- KyJo60

this is realy good, and i kinda like the slow pace to it, it flows nicley.

your story looks really interesting

Aw, this is cute. Maddie barely talks and it's pretty funny! Your grammar was decent, compared to what I've seen. However, it could still use some work. If you would like me to help you edit/beta, tell me. Also tell me if you don't so that I know not to wait for a reply. However, write more! Don't get discouraged if you don't feel like you're getting a lot of readers. Hopefully, you're writing for personal entertainment and nothing else. Alright, let me know about the whole beta thing. Later and keep writing! -JSM

dont let it bring you down! i have 7 chapters, and they are long ones to, but i have only about 7 i think. just keep going because ppl actually like it ]

SHEYEAH! THIS IS FREAKIN AWESOME! ]

THIS LOKS MAD INTERESTING! o.o she doesnt talk..?

I'm really starting to love this story. I love the way there appears to be completely different layers to Maddie's personality, and the way she acts...I like it. Keep writing - I'll be anticipating more. )