Anonymous chapter 1 . 11/23/2009
Alright, I'm going to give you my advice as a published science fiction author. This is going to sound harsh, but I in no way mean it to make you stop writing. On the contrary, in fact, you should write far more. Learn basic spelling and grammar. Some of your lines begin with capitals, while most don't. Also, a bunch of paragraphs mysteriously end and begin on the next line. Don't bold EVERY SINGLE WORD, nor should you write names in all caps, even if they are names of important characters (like deities, etc.). Basic formatting skills are also necessary, because I was already tired of reading this after the first paragraph. It reads like a badly written newspaper. There's no action, and the dialogue sounds like it was written by an eight year old. All in all, you shouldn't try to write creatively until you know how to write in the first place. Learn how, and then get back to us.