I like your other stories than this.

I liked this. It's a little weird, but something in it appeals to me...

It's very different, in a good way :D I've creeped through many of your stories now, more to go though, muhahaha!

Your skills at discribing the situations and the feelings are stunning. However, this story feels...unfinished. I feel that we do not know the leading characters well enough to react with them. Maybe, you should add some more details about her and their relationship. Overall, I can't wait to read more of your creations

wow.

haha that was quite the unexpected ending! i'll admit, i was still sort of imagining the standard proposal and a realization of her obvious mistake. but it definitely had a more mysterious edge than all that. i especially loved the way her thoughts change throughout, like how she hears tension in his tone and thinks he must know about the bottle, or the switch from thinking he was devious to "oh - devious me!"

and of course the gun was perfect. the whole story sort of reminded me of the picture of dorian gray, in a weird way. and i have read the yellow wallpaper - it really creeped me out. haha but in a good way, i suppose. anyways, this was great, and definitely not what i had imagined when i clicked on the link. thanks for the read! this was my first review on fiction press (and i think it was for a well-deserved oneshot). :)

ohh..she's gone wacko? ehh.. she was a little clouded by the potion ..hehe..oh well :D

Oh. That was weird. I read - well, tried to read The Yellow Wallpaper, but ended up skimming through it. It was twisted, lol.

And this one...She sees a knife instead of a ring? And where does she get the gun from?

Good job, though!

I loved the "Oh dear!" and "Oh, how devious!"... it made it sound as though it was so old-fashioned! ] Really lovely. Exciting and well put together. But... so he was going to propose... but where was the knife he thought of? He-he, sorry, I'm a little stupid today...

Excellent job!

~Victoria