|Reviews for inhaling her thoughts|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/20/2010
I think a few lines (like the third and eleventh) could have used a comma to separate those phrases.
Another thing that confused me is why would you have a pack of mint? Like the actual leave? Did you mean mints?
Anyway, I like piece. I think you describe how you feel in this relationship so well. You managed to capture the feeling of being less than, but still completely infatuated with her. Really great descriptions.
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| speakeasy-love chapter 1 . 11/22/2009
i really like this poem. it has a lot of emotion to it..
its very good.
| sackz chapter 1 . 11/22/2009
Amazing. once again