Reviews for Car Grease and Diamond Earrings |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Shshshdhxhc it's so cute damn it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I LOVED IT |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ahhhh this is so cuteeee!, |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Favorite Couple of well... Ever Award |
![]() ![]() ![]() Breezy, happy little short story. Looking forward to more! (btw it's 'land-line' not 'lan-line') |
![]() ![]() ![]() ["I want you to take me on a date," Gretchen said, nodding seriously, "I want to go to that swing dance bar over on Central, and I want you to buy me fish and chips. I want to dine-in so we can dance for free. I want you to take me on dates for a while, and then I want you to bite the bullet and ask me to marry you. If you do all that, maybe I'll forgive you trying to act like it wouldn't work out between us. Is that a deal?"] -loved that part : ) |
![]() ![]() A nice first chapter to start with, but one part really bothers me. If the roads are closed, they're closed. If they couldn't send a car to her for that reason, even if her car was working, she shouldn't be able to go to them with it on those same closed roads. It would make a lot more sense if there were a different reason. If you still need a cause for her to for her to feel guilt and them to blame her willfulness on being unable to come, she needs a different reason. If you want to keep the reason, they should be less mad at her, but the cause of the storm&broken down car would still keep her at this location for you. (Like maybe when she headed out it wasn't that bad, but she got halfway there and heard on the radio that a bunch of roads had to be closed and just as she was about to turn around her car breaks down) |
![]() ![]() ![]() adorable:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story is freaking awesome! Even though it's rather short, I still feel very emotionally invested in these characters. Gretchen's shock at how a man should normally treat a woman is...well, shocking. lol. And I definitely enjoyed the happy ending. ) Fantastic work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful story, loved the ending. And i like Gretchen's personality. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww! I loved this! My heart broke when she left him. I'm so happy you made it a happy ending! |
![]() ![]() ![]() love the story~ do you have a story about marcus too? i so wanna know what happened to him |
![]() ![]() ![]() That's a good ending. Short but sweet story. Thanks for sharing. |