|Reviews for There Were No Stars|
| Ida Dallas chapter 1 . 11/25/2009
I'd say this piece was well done, just my two cents. I agree- repetition is an excellent device for horror.
It just conveys so much more... a whole lot in such a short piece. Yay you:)
| Dragoneer chapter 1 . 11/23/2009
You conveyed a fantastic amount of horror storyline in such a small piece, incredible job. I agree with Twilight in saying the use of "Blink" was very powerful. A few grammatical errors but with a few touch ups this would be a perfect short story.
| SilverTwilight chapter 1 . 11/22/2009
Wow. This is aptly categorized under horror. The repetition of the time in this is powerful (I've known insomnia), and the use of "blink".
It was confusing to me that he was stumbling randomly in the yard when you wrote that "the winter air felt good. He felt it flow through his lungs, reminding him that he's alive. That he's...awake." which makes it seem like it cleared his head and woke him up a little.
Also some past-present tense irregularities. These are all small parts of an dark, interesting story though.