|Reviews for early december|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/20/2010
The first two lines kind of confused me. The lack of punctuation made me think the barbed border was describing the tears, but that didn't make sense since you used a and tears is plural. I think some punctuation to separate those thoughts would be helpful.
I like "brisk twilight." It's a nice description. The last line is great too. The idea of calling for mercy creates a great emotion in the piece.
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| shinco chapter 1 . 11/30/2009
Wow, I really liked this! It makes me think of someone in the cold evening of winter and they're so cold, they ask for mercy from God because they think they might die. Hope I'm not too far off, there :\ I really liked the second line! That one really struck me! _ As always, you're a great writer! GO SHAZAAM!
| Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 11/24/2009
Wow, this is a powerful haiku. I really like it! Keep writing!