Reviews for Heir to the Labyrinth
BloodWillSpill chapter 2 . 1/6/2013
I liked the irony in her name. The child of darkness being named Angel. The grammar mistakes pulled me out of the story though. The cliffhanger snatched my interest again.
BloodWillSpill chapter 1 . 1/3/2013
I like your prologue but some stuff kind of got me. Like how a mastemas betrayed the queen when darkness seemed to be powerful. The dark side seemed to be winning despite the queen's defeat. Though mastemas just told the king for no reason. I also don't get why shape shifters would be dark but werewolves be light. They're practically the same. These are just my opinions. I still liked the story though!
Ditto123 chapter 14 . 1/20/2012
I really love this story but sadly I have no idea to give to you. Well i hope that you can get past this authors block. If that's what you would call it. Good luck!
Carmel March chapter 12 . 12/31/2011
I can't tell you how much I enjoy reading this! The plot is moving along great and I just love the characters! Keep up the great work :)

EclipseoftheHeart chapter 12 . 12/19/2010
This is really good... Imaginative, funny, interesting... I can't wait for more... Xx
Evil-Angel92 chapter 12 . 12/5/2010
So I haven't been able to get on these last couples weeks but it made me happy when you updated! As usual can't wait for the next chapter! :)
NewGirlz chapter 11 . 7/15/2010
Ok, first off, I LOVE your story! Your a really good author! I cant wait to see where you take this story and it sucks that ur computer broke. i hate it when mine brakes, too.

Ok, anyway from a readers point of view, i can two paths this story can take. One, you can have Angel fall for Zabriel. then he finds out that she is the princess and takes her back to his father. From there, you can probably get some other ideas, but i think it would be cool if he had to take her through the Labyrinth and since its alive and likes Angel the Labyrinth saves her and takes her to her people and they rebel against the King.

The second one, is that you can have her stay at home and avoid Zabriel. then she starts falling for Julian (or not), but then the uncles tell her all about what happened to her world. they take her back, and she helps the rebels and takes over her home again.

In reality, there's so many ways you can take after each of these chooses, but that's all that i can help you with right now, sorry i can't do more. I cant wait til you update again!
xXxR M GxXx chapter 10 . 5/13/2010
Can't wait for the next chapter, it's addicting.
name redacted chapter 1 . 5/8/2010
Pretty interesting. Just a few minor incongruencies; at the end, the kind doesn't know about the queen's child, but sets up a plan to send his (dead?) son into the above world to find her. Also, a couple of mechanical and word usage errors you may want to proofread for. Otherwise, a good story so far. I like the way that Light and Dark are used but neither is necessarily good or evil. Just a question, but for there to be demon slayers, don't you need demons?
LAzHellRaiser chapter 10 . 4/14/2010
Nice story. Great idea and content but can u work on the grammar? It'd also b nice if you italicizes the the thoughts or something
LuminessDark17 chapter 9 . 3/17/2010
Need more updates!i really like your writing style and your character detail i just have one thing that confuses me..wouldn't having silver brown hair make angel have gray hairs?
Evil-Angel92 chapter 9 . 3/16/2010
Oh my goodness it was good can't wait till the next chapter. Please update soon.
Evil-Angel92 chapter 8 . 2/7/2010
This is really good, I can't wait for the next chapter. Oh, and you do have some spelling errors, just thought you should know.
Evil-Angel92 chapter 2 . 2/7/2010
I want an aston martin db9, they are swet!
Evil-Angel92 chapter 1 . 2/7/2010
O, this is going to be a good, I can tell.
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