Could you please put the link or tell us your name as an author because I cant find the book.
Sincerely U MadeMyLifeComplete

Do you think you could provide the link for your book? Thank you.

Hey, you say that your book is on sale. Where is it? I can't seem to find out where it's being sold.

Will it be available for purchase in England? I really enjoy this story so I would love to buy it and find out what happens, but I live in England.

Also, where is it on sale from?

Thanks :)

- Hearts of Pyjamas

The idea and the plot intrigue me, but I couldn't even finish the first chapter. The characters here are extremely unbelievable. No one would be THAT obsessed with these guys. I feel like you should have started with some interaction regarding something else, and eased the idea in. There is an incredible amount of dialogue, and very little description, which I found hard to follow and read. You need to work on your grammar, spelling mistakes and your punctuation, asap.

I am going to save the link to this story and check back in a few months, where I hope it will have improved. I'm not trying to be mean, the storyline is intriguing and I like your characters. I just think you need to develop them a little more. They don't feel REAL, and mostly this is down to the fact that ALL they talk about is the forbidden four.

By the way, your prologue was fantastically written.

i'm liking it so far. you should check up on your grammar sometimes

i love this story.

Please keep writing.

That's all I can say.

Oo I just finished this and it was really good :) I hope it's ot finished o.o or tht there's a sequel :) but anyways Good Job!

Hey, I just started to read your story but so far it has been awesome. At first I thought it was a bit similar to twilight :s but then the whole pixy thing just got me lol. Then I swear you quoted a line from Charmed. But anyways , your story is... Original :) I like alot. But you do have a great deal of grammatical errors you might want to look over. :)

Hey, I just reviewed, but in light of your offer I will do it again, hope you don't mind. Why did you need to cut out the story? Also I hope you're making a sequel, there's a lot of unanswered questions. In context about which chapter to do from Jay's point of view, I vote for "Dates can be killer".

Hello, I haven't read all of this story yet, but here are my thoughts so far. There are a lot of grammer mistakes in this, maybe think about getting a beta. Some of this (epsecialy the line where Leon says he's 17) seems very Twilighty to me. However, I guess all stories are like other stories one way or another. Other then those things, the story seems good so far. Keep writing

Okay, I finished. As promised, here is your review :D:D

Great job, I hope you update soon. There are definitly some typos, but I saw that you are working on that...

Again, amazing story, I can't wait for more!

Eva

I loved how the events are happening so far :) :) :) when is the next update?

Great chap:-).

Nice character development :) good going.