Reviews for Flaws aka Perfections
annayh44 chapter 1 . 10/30
yeah I notice they kiss by muff hahaha..funny one shot
annoyance chapter 1 . 2/11/2011
This was very cute :)

Alkali.Alias chapter 1 . 7/1/2010
Did you just kiss me?

Haha, wonderfully done! Sometimes, dialogue is enough for characterization. This was one of those times.
x Farii chapter 1 . 5/7/2010
Cute :]]
flyingpencil chapter 1 . 4/7/2010
I am a dialogue fan! I love it!
balloonfista chapter 1 . 1/2/2010 cute.

Yellow.Jellow chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
very nice! the dialogue works well I think. You used "your" instead of "you're" (you are). "your" is possessive. sorry, it's a pet peeve.
ghurl00 chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
Hehe, cute!) Fluff, fluff, Love it!
Beautiful Destination chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Very cute and funny :)
Virginia T. Beth chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Hmm... It's interesting. Quick and sweet, not bad. The only thing is that you used 'your' instead of 'you're' twice. Other than that it's interesting!
Insomnia Breeds Insanity chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Sweet! I love it.
pinkguppie chapter 1 . 12/27/2009
Very, very cute :)
iread.don'twrite chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
so that's my penname, i was just o lazy to log in, it seems.

aww this is so cute! you made my day(: although it would make more sense (to me at least) to have each line in quotations. for example,

"You really are clueless."

"No, I am not!"

i mean, we can tell who's speaking, having the him/her thing there kinda draws me away from the story a bit.

now i'm outta here. off ta read some mo' of your stuff(: you have me hooked.

DianaSweetie chapter 1 . 12/6/2009
Punslinger chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
Telling a story in dialogue is a real challenge, but you handled it well. I was reminded of some of Hemmingway's fiction where characters talk all around a subject without bringing it out in the open, but readers can feel the emotionally charged atmosphere between them.
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