|Reviews for sunday morning|
| ashen blue chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
i can't really like how you wrote this poem, but it also seems a little rough in parts. however, there are some real gems in your language:
"everyday it's the same conclusion,
i need a shower and nutella"
"napping and kissing only leads to one thing"
it's a really cool concept, and i love the imagery. i feel like your grammar is sporadic and maybe you could work the diction because it can be over-the-top at times...and simpler language might express the content of the poem better.
| tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
this is beautiful!
| Long chapter 1 . 12/3/2009
i don't usually get poetry (it's hard for my head to work in that mode) so i don't have much in the way of criticism. i do enjoy and appreciate the clear images and mood though. it makes me want to breath on a cold window on a sunny day.