|Reviews for One|
| i88 chapter 1 . 12/8/2009
I like how it's sort of vague and mysterious in a way. The journal was fun and the way you just potrayed the scientists as labeling the expiriements just set the envirorment the main character was in. Kudos!
| Zee Frostfeather chapter 1 . 12/5/2009
Its nice. I like it.
Kinda reminicsnt of a horror story but not, ya know?
| Erik Blais chapter 1 . 12/5/2009
The journal thing was interesting. I liked it. It's good to experiment with how you tell a story.
One thing about the end: you didn't have to keep reiterating that the boys were Even and Odd, the reader assumes that so once is more than enough.
This seems like part of a larger story. It needs backstory into the characters, what their past lives were like, and what they are going to do next.
Good start, keep writing!
| bunnystarz101 chapter 1 . 12/5/2009
I like how you named the kids Even and Odd. I wonder what the scientists did to them and how they got there. This reminds me of the Maximum Ride series. Are any of the others ever coming back? Did they have names? I think you should make 09 come back later on if you decide to continue. Overall, great job.