this is going pretty well in my opinion XD i hope an update comes soon

this is so cool! what if he pulled some kinda law thing that says that quibilah has to stay there and then her school group trys to get her back? update soon!

That was amazing! PLEASE write more! I loved it.

This story rocks! Can't wait for the update! ;)

like it so far, update soon!

Hey, this story sounds very good so far and I hope that you will continue it. I look forward to seeing how you develop the story. Besides Anhur sounds like a hottie! Haha good luck writing and happy holidays!

Nice start, the story is progressing pretty well. However, it seems to need so more depth, like a better transition between places, and also you can start some sentances in a different way, like have a mixture of passive and active voice. Because now the writing isn't changing, thus it gets a little redundent. But I do like your plot, and can't wait to see what happens next.

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